bonsoir svpp quelqu'un pourait enrichir/améliorer mon texte. Merci Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you because I need to find a job to finance my studies . I
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bonsoir svpp quelqu'un pourait enrichir/améliorer mon texte. Merci
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you because I need to find a job to finance my studies .
I am 14 years old and a student at Elsa Triolet college in Lyon. I am very interested in this job because I love take orders and serve costumers in a restaurant. I haven't got experience in this domain so It is a rewarding experience .
I enjoy being in contact with the costumers and I work very hard so I think I would be brillant for the job.
Thank you for your attention.
Sincerely,
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you because I need to find a job to finance my studies .
I am 14 years old and a student at Elsa Triolet college in Lyon. I am very interested in this job because I love take orders and serve costumers in a restaurant. I haven't got experience in this domain so It is a rewarding experience .
I enjoy being in contact with the costumers and I work very hard so I think I would be brillant for the job.
Thank you for your attention.
Sincerely,
2 Réponse
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1. Réponse Solt
Au lieu de dire I am 14 years old, tu pourrais dire I am a 14-years-old girl, sinon c'est pas mal -
2. Réponse Laloupsi
Tu peux dire a la place de dire i love take orders and serve costumers :I love to be helpfull to people in serving them sinon c bienn :))